(haiku) From the Back Yard

(haiku) From the Back Yard

Cardinal on fence,

Momentary red still life,

Flies away—that’s good

Cold morning air, one

Bumble-bee under flower

Following its call

Rabbit’s tall long legs,

Wary, lope across the yard:

Mitigated zeal

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In conversation, I prefer Christopher. My mom named me after Christopher Robin, after all. In writing, I use “C L Couch” (or, more simply, “c l couch”) because the form is genderless and also frankly easier to use. I have awful writer’s cramp. I am an educator more or less retired, more or less due to disability. At present, I live in Mechanicsburg, Pennsylvania (USA). My writing here I mean to be occasional and also devotional. Either or both. The banner and profile photographs are by my friend and peer Debra Danielson. More of Debbie’s work to be enjoyed is at debradanielson.org. Thanks to each of you and both and all for coming to my blog.

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May 2, 2016

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jacquelineobyikocha
May 2, 2016 at 7:58 pm

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Oh I like this. Sounds almost like a children’s story cum fairytale and nature ramble. Well done 🙂

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clcouch123
May 2, 2016 at 9:06 pm

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Thank you! I’m fond of all those, so maybe they worked their way in.

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rosemawrites
May 3, 2016 at 9:54 am

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a rabbit on your backyard!! Geez! take me! 🙂

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- clcouch123
  May 4, 2016 at 1:44 am
  
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  This rabbit looked athletic. I was impressed. Fortunately, my sister’s dogs were looking the other way. What kind of rabbits do you have?
  
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  - rosemawrites
    May 4, 2016 at 2:38 am
    
    Geez!!! An athletic rabbit! That was awesome! 😀 😀 😀
    I once had a rabbit. A white and very cute one given by my boyfriend. It lasted a day only. 😦 Because I let it eat bread. 😦 Idiot, me!
  - clcouch123
    May 4, 2016 at 12:58 pm
    
    I know nothing about caring for rabbits. I must enjoy them in nature.
jademwong
May 3, 2016 at 4:59 pm

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Sounds like a child wrote this poem and yet there is a level of depth that I think only a wise adult can bring. Which goes to show how well you did in weaving both a childlike innocence and a grown-up realism 🙂

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- clcouch123
  May 4, 2016 at 1:31 am
  
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  Goodness, thank you! I have to admit, I saw these creatures in my sister’s backyard while playing with her dogs. And I felt as if I were seeing them for the first time (like a child’s seeing). But when I wrote about them, I was still me. You saw these perspectives coming together. You taught me about my verse.
  
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clcouch123
May 4, 2016 at 1:41 am

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Your good friend Christopher does greatly enjoy reading his good friend Rosema’s travel narratives. Publishing a set of poetry is a dream. I’m so glad you’re going for it! (See how firmly I feel about your work?) As to publishing, do you know jacquelineobyikocha? I think we were all in the poetry workshop together. She just published her poetry–here’s her post about that: https://acookingpotandtwistedtales.com/2016/04/29/finally-here-it-is-my-first-published-book-and-i-am-bawling-out-my-eyes-and-smiling-at-the-same-time/?c=30151#comment-30151. I think she would offer some helpful advice. There are a number of ways to go, I’m sure. Maybe it starts with selecting a general theme and then gathering your work. However I might help, I will!

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